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Thursday, March 08, 2007
Ruby Red for Poetry Thursday
Out of left field. Sorry. Really no excuse...There are many women living in my head. They surprise me sometimes! I honestly don't think that this poem is based on fact...least I don't think it is....
My Rules
There it was
tucked in a box
tied with a pretty bow.
My red betrayal.
I have always been
a white lace girl.
Maybe pink when
I feel the need
to blush.
Even black is a push
come to shove.
Not really my form.
I was certain you knew me.
So why this
sudden need
for scarlet?
Am I to be
someone else tonight?
Should I keep my
smart mouth shut?
But perhaps you
prefer it open.
Tell you what
make you a deal.
I'll be your vixen
when you buy
your own condoms.
Til then,
Let me drive.
wlf 9:33 pm
Lets mosey on over to PT..shall we.... This should be interesting.
My Rules
There it was
tucked in a box
tied with a pretty bow.
My red betrayal.
I have always been
a white lace girl.
Maybe pink when
I feel the need
to blush.
Even black is a push
come to shove.
Not really my form.
I was certain you knew me.
So why this
sudden need
for scarlet?
Am I to be
someone else tonight?
Should I keep my
smart mouth shut?
But perhaps you
prefer it open.
Tell you what
make you a deal.
I'll be your vixen
when you buy
your own condoms.
Til then,
Let me drive.
wlf 9:33 pm
Lets mosey on over to PT..shall we.... This should be interesting.
Labels: Poetry Thursday
18 Comments:
Oh, this ruby is a GEM.
"Should I keep my smart mouth shut? But perhaps you prefer it open."
Great work. Your poetry just keeps getting better.
Out of left field maybe, but more likely the right side of your brain! I love the foxy flavour to it and the picture it paints of one sassy female. Keep writing!
From one sassy diva to another, I say good show. Love your vision and voice.
Rose
xo
LOL... Sorry, but I get the sense of giggling in this poem. Slightly naughty, but determined to have a good time.
Why is red lace so threatening? I love your closing stanzas. That'll teach him. :)
How fun - a woman strong enough to reject the "strong" color, who makes a power play, too!
I like the voince in this poem and I'd react to red lace the same way too - why is that?
Oh, that was great! I love the tone, and the use of colours. The last three stanzas are just excellent. I'm glad you're brave enough to celebrate all the different women living in your head - makes for highly entertaining poetry.
Wendy,
Who was buying the condoms before?
you put it out there for sure. No what? it was great! Full of fire and grace.
rel
That was brilliant! Love the final lines. You should let that woman out of your head more often..
Ooh, this ruby red is on fire! Well done, you!
What a smart poem, and I love that dagger of an ending.
love it love it love it..great fun..made me grin at the end..thanks for the visit..m
You wicked girl. Of course, you always drive, don't you? At least, the one-of-you who wears the scarlet pants! (I've always suspected that writers--particularly poets--have more than one persona at the wheel.)
;)
"red betrayal"
Perfect. Saucy. And I completely second what G said - I love that the narrator rejects the red so violently and yet is still so strong and in control.
Bravo.
Oh yes!
ahhhh...
i love the voice in this.
I agree - and I love the ending.
Wendy, I almost forgot to tell you how much I LOVEd your essay in Ask Poetry Thursday. It was perfect!
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