...quiet, about a lot of things...
Thursday, June 01, 2006
Poetry Thursday
Song lyrics are great out loud.
Hey little girl,
Is your daddy home?
Did he go away and
Leave you all alone
Bruce Springsteen "I'm on Fire"
With that couplet, Bruce captures the hearts of all the abandoned and disguarded daughters and women...and paints the picture of many an odd love story that follows.
the following poem has audible elements, but, is quiet...just like me.
LAME
Close your eyes
he said
His words hung
icy, in the air
Listen, instead.
Hollow hoofbeats
tapped scrathy gravel
in rythmn, in sync
and then, a slight
hesitant note.
a break in cadence,
missed a beat
he let me hear
where he hurt.
walking back
silent,
I listened to
our broken gaits
i wondered if
he closed his eyes,
could he hear, clearly,
where I hurt?
Nudging my pocket,
his response,
Way too easy.
No need to
close my eyes.
wlf 8:33am
PS....Kinda inspired by yesterdays enrty.
Hey little girl,
Is your daddy home?
Did he go away and
Leave you all alone
Bruce Springsteen "I'm on Fire"
With that couplet, Bruce captures the hearts of all the abandoned and disguarded daughters and women...and paints the picture of many an odd love story that follows.
the following poem has audible elements, but, is quiet...just like me.
LAME
Close your eyes
he said
His words hung
icy, in the air
Listen, instead.
Hollow hoofbeats
tapped scrathy gravel
in rythmn, in sync
and then, a slight
hesitant note.
a break in cadence,
missed a beat
he let me hear
where he hurt.
walking back
silent,
I listened to
our broken gaits
i wondered if
he closed his eyes,
could he hear, clearly,
where I hurt?
Nudging my pocket,
his response,
Way too easy.
No need to
close my eyes.
wlf 8:33am
PS....Kinda inspired by yesterdays enrty.
Labels: Poetry Thursday
4 Comments:
I liked the first one --
"Hey little girl,
Is your daddy home?
Did he go away and
Leave you all alone"
wonderful..
Thanks for sharing..
he let me hear
where he hurt
Wow--those "h" sounds, the slant rhymes, the simple words, the compactness: wow oh wow oh wow!
I love this poem! I'm so glad you stopped by my blog, which led me back here to read it!
Your poem is so quite and economical, but speaks volumes.
Lovely!
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